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作者:发布时间:19-02-27浏览次数:

 前言

一众烤鸭的成绩单中,相信雅思写作单项分数都是令人瑟瑟发抖的,甚至6+分数都是难以企及的,究竟难度在哪里呢?

 

其一,逻辑啊逻辑,雅思写作考官的老爷老太们就好比用他们丰富的人生经历在批改幼稚园小朋友的作文啊,既没有灵魂交流,又没有深度论证。

 

其二,语言表达呢,东拼西凑不够的时候,模版句看起来都很高大上啊,那我背下来肯定腻害了(半凉了)。

 

 

但是俗话说:

 

 A watched pot never boils

心急吃不了热豆腐

 

WELL beginning is half done

好的开头是成功的一半

 

那么今天我们来讨论一下大作文的开头段写作吧。

 

请看例题:

 

Some people think that the use of aircraft is not practical and causes many problems thus should be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

 

论证:飞机使用不现实+造成很多问题 ---> 应该减少使用 or 不应该减少使用

 

同学1—— I think that the use of airplane should be reduced.  (给人感觉:尴尬,干瘪, 霸道

 

同学2—— With the development of science and technology, airplanes are playing increasingly important role in our daily life. However, whether the use of airplane should be reduced aroused people's heated discussion. In my opinion, it is necessary to restrict the ultimate use of it.

该同学写得没那么干瘪和霸道,但是依然尴尬,因为逻辑的强转折!!!

 

随着科技的发展,飞机在我们的生活中扮演着日益重要的角色。但是,飞机的使用是否应该减少引起了不少人的争论。我觉得确实应该减少。

 

以上示例是不是自己写作时,熟悉的配方~

 

划重点:

 

驳论文-首段组成:背景句+题干改写+个人立场(我同意/我不同意/我中立)

重要tip:逻辑完整,以及合理运用功能句。

那么,考官青睐的大作文首段,应该如何写呢?

 

功能句法

1. Nowadays, … is playing an … part/role in… /when…

 

2. In the present days, with the development of …/ thanks to…, … is becoming more and more…

 

3. Today the way we do… is heavily influenced by…

 

4. Recent years has witnessed the areas development/changes of…

 

问题来了:功能句在实际写作中该如何运用呢?

 

请看剑桥官方范文首段:

 

Today the way we consider human psychology and mental development is heavily influenced by the genetic sciences.(背景句)We now understand the importance of inherited characteristics more than ever before. (题干改写)Yet we are still unable to decide whether an individual's personality and development are more influenced by genetic factors (nature) or by the environment (nurture).(个人立场)

 

所以实际上,内容决定语言,只要模版句运用得当,就是功能句了。

 

继续练习,请看题目:

 

Rich countries often give financial aid to poor countries, but it does not eliminate the poverty, so rich countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than the financial aid.

 

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

version 1—— Nowadays, the aids from rich countries play increasingly important roles in the development of poor countries. Most importantly, financial aids are provided. However, some people think that financial aids are not important and rich countries should give the poor countries other types of help. In my opinion, …

 

Version 2—— Today, thanks to the help from rich countries, particularly financial aids, the development of poor countries is becoming easier, but money does not solve all the problem. In my opinion, …

 

以上version1和2相应运用了功能句1和2,依照此结构

 

大家能不能试着运用功能句3.4. 继续完成version3.4.呢?欢迎大家在评论中写下来大家一起讨论噢~

 

期待下次的大作文首段写作分享与同学们再见!

 

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